I've been lurking on this forum for a little while and have read most of the threads I have come across regarding this topic. I was hoping you guys/girls can roast my essay/summary so I can improve it? I have used the links in regards to readability and actually watched the DoD Course on Plain Language suggested by Stearmann4. I feel like it comes across as a bit fluffy and not enough concise detail, and trying to avoid the cliche sentences is easier said than done! Let me know what you think, thank you!
“Why I Want to be an Army Aviator”
The military has always been on my mind since a young age. I love military history and strategy, and come from a family of prior service members and civil servants. The camaraderie, loyalty, and great sense of purpose that comes from a military lifestyle and career is appealing to me. I’m able to serve my country, be part of something that’s bigger than myself, and be a good role model. I’m also able to directly and indirectly have a positive influence on people’s lives while pursuing my dream of being an aviator in one of the world’s most lethal flying forces.
I love the freedom of being able to fly and land virtually anywhere, as well as the thrill of essentially defying the laws of gravity. As a scuba diver, I understand how important it is to keep your composure during stressful situations. This trait is also reflected through my extensive international experience of leading students through various countries while seamlessly integrating into diverse cultures. As an aviator, I can make a greater impact on the lives of my fellow soldiers from the air than from the ground by providing CAS, Medivac, and Recon. This will indirectly have a positive impact on their family back home because they are safe.
Being a Warrant Officer appeals to me because it provides the opportunity to refine my leadership skills and test them by setting the best example for my men. The position allows me to challenge myself to become part of the prestigious three percent of technical and tactical experts of my field. Being a slight perfectionist, mastering the criteria of my career is what I strive for. Going through the WOFT process, the willingness of Senior Warrant Officers to help prospective candidates succeed is a trait I admire greatly.