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#21 future_aviator


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Posted 14 May 2019 - 20:16

Notice:  Disregard this post.  I have since completely scraped this essay and did another one.  My new essay has already been sent to the board, so there is no point in making revisions now.   

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Posted 17 May 2019 - 09:30

Selected in the May Board.  Here is my revised essay: (Please do not copy mine, I'm including it so I can show how to make improvements.) 


            “Army Warrant Officers shall… Contribute their past experiences, service, and knowledge to a dedicated effort for a betterment of the future.” I intend to fulfill this value from the Warrant Officer Code.  I strive to become an Army Aviator so I can contribute my leadership experience, passion, and my technical knowledge.

            Becoming an Army Aviator means more to me than just flying an aircraft.  I have been inspired by friends and family who have served in aviation.  It started with my grandfather who was a flight engineer during Vietnam, and one of many servicemen in my family.  His experiences inspired me as a kid.  I didn’t know about the Army W.O.F.T. program until I befriended an active duty MH-60 pilot.  After expressing my interests in aviation, Mr. Cortez encouraged me to put together a packet.  He and several other Army Aviators have been mentors, and have ignited a passion in me. 

            Furthermore, I want to use the leadership experience I have attained through Boy Scouts and volunteer service.  While I was a scout, I had leadership roles within my Troop.  I led community service, hiking trips, etc.  Those leadership roles taught me time management and social skills, and enforced the Boy Scout motto: “Be prepared.”  Also, to become a state scholar, I led 80 hours of volunteer service in high school working with TN Walking Horses.  I was a leader responsible for teaching kids how to care for and ride the horses properly.

            Finally, I want to become an Army Aviator to use the technical skills I have already developed.  One factor that sets me apart from most applicants is that I possess a combination of hands-on and academic experience. After working in the automotive field for almost two years, I have gained experience in diagnosing mechanical issues and general problem-solving.  Academically, I have a considerable amount of S.T.E.M. education.  During physics labs, I worked with aeronautical theories that translate to rotary-wing concepts.  Moreover, I have recently acquired five rotary-wing flight hours, which improved hand-eye coordination and provided basic flight skills.

            In conclusion, I am confident that my technical skills, leadership qualities, and drive will allow me to excel in flight training and become a skillful Army Aviator. 

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Posted 18 May 2019 - 10:11

Glad to hear you were selected SwissK31. Good luck in the future.
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