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I have written out a few rough drafts and revisions to my essay and had some peers give me advice. This is what I have so far. If you have the time please give it a read and give some insight or advice on what I should change, add, remove, etc. Some background on me before the essay. I am a 68W, PFC with a year and a half of service. I was a holdover at airborne school (injury before I even started) for 8 months. I just got to my unit a couple weeks ago, and my leadership is all for sending me to do greater things. I have not taken the SIFT yet, but I have a study guide and I am studying every day. I also need to get the flight physical done first but I am not in the best shape right this moment and don't meet height/weight. I am working on that every day and will be good to go by the time it's actually time to get the physical done. This is something I've always wanted to do, and unfortunately I didn't know about the street to seat program before I enlisted. I aspire not only to be an Army Aviator, but to be seen as a leader as a warrant officer. Just seeing and hearing helicopters roar overhead turns my head in awe, knowing I will be the one flying one day. I will be an excellent Army Aviator, and an exemplary leader as a warrant officer. After playing soccer for 5 years, I learned the value of being a team player. Decision making and leadership skills were developed as I was team captain for 3 of those years. During trade school I volunteered as class leader, excelling for all 4 years. Having this role further enhanced my leadership ability and team orientation. Attending a technical high school also greatly contributed to a strong technical ability. At Fort Benning I volunteered to help at the Martin Army Community Hospital, increasing screening efficiency and expediting the process to admit patients in need of help. I also volunteered at the Consolidated Troop Medical Clinic. During AIT I volunteered for a squad leader position, in charge of over 30 soldiers daily. While serving in this position I was appointed the tactical leader for the entire platoon during a 14 day FTX at Camp Bullis. I was chosen because my peers acknowledged my capability of operating under high stress, and as a leader. I have always dreamt of being an aviator, and I am fully ready and capable to turn those dreams into reality. Due to my past experiences in leadership roles, ability to operate under stress, technical ability, team orientation, and greatest of all the will to fly, I will become an aviator and I will be an outstanding leader as a warrant officer.
I had this critiqued awhile ago by a current warrant from this forum. I have finally gotten back my stamped physical and want to touch up my packet as much as possible before I am able to submit it. Please be honest, its much appreciated! To call ones self an Army Aviator is a great honor and responsibility. The legacy they have carved is unmatched. I have seen first hand the impact they can make for our ground forces. I hope that my qualifications will afford me the opportunity to one day call myself an Army Aviator and make an impact myself. Being enlisted as a horizontal engineer has provided me opportunities to learn and grow as an individual. I have been trusted with millions of dollars worth of equipment. Being responsible for the safe operation of heavy equipment has become second nature and is a quality that is also vital in Army Aviation. My attention to detail and doing the little things such as 360 degree checks may mean the life or death of a fellow soldier. I have also become proficient in working under blackout conditions with NVGs in order to accomplish my tasks. It is not a responsibility I take lightly. Through my time in the Army, I have learned that a good leader must know both when to lead and when to follow. This is a trait that I believe I strongly possess. As a U.S. Army Aviator, I will strive to become a technical and tactical expert in order to ensure the success of my mission. I also understand that my role would include providing expert advice to commanding officers so that they can use aviation assets most efficiently. If given the opportunity to become both a Warrant Officer, and a U.S. Army Aviator, I will strive every day to become the expert that is relied upon for these decisions.